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Sin - Vanity by ~waiting4chaos:iconwaiting4chaos:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark




Like a pleague.
It will move through your body.
Travel through your blood.
Poison your mind.
Deminish your Dreams.
Burn your Desires.

Pride...
The Prime factor in this Disease.
The Subatomic prime in self-destruction.
Duplicating...
Multipling...
Conforming...

Bleed me.
Cut me open and take this parasite from my soul.
Leeching onto my humanity.
Slowly Comsuming everything that makes me different.
Carnage in my eyes.
Chaos in my heart.
Disiray in my mind.
But so much is better without you.
©2002-2009 ~waiting4chaos
:iconwaiting4chaos:

Author's Comments

Vanity the sin of Choice by most people..
Also know as "Pride".


This will be 1 of 7 of the Sin Series

-Chris

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~imyourshootingstar Dec 6, 2002, 2:39:06 PM
Hey Kiddo! Man, Your writing amazes me. You are suck an amazing write/photographer..... Thanks.

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~xazrealx Dec 6, 2002, 2:55:43 PM
Great as always A+ work that never ceases to amaze :) (Smile)

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~cyborgagent017 Dec 6, 2002, 7:01:59 PM
WHOA! CRAZY COOL!

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Hello and stuff.
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`alchemism Dec 7, 2002, 10:05:50 AM
Yes. Nod

Short, and sweet, and in your face. I really like this one. When I write it's usually short bursts of thought...things that come out with no need for expansion or large words. Great stuff.

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~punkrockgrrrl Dec 7, 2002, 11:29:05 PM
nice and simple. i like the last line.

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Pissed off and articulate...
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`spunj13 Dec 9, 2002, 9:05:55 PM
i think...(in my opinion, of course) that it might've been better to only hint at pride and actually not use the word in the poem itself... another thing that i read once in a book on poetry writing ..is to avoid the word like ... for some reason it takes away from the overall meaningfullness of a piece

//spunj13

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wind up your soldiers and send them to see, the skies and the oceans their coffins will be
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